My MASTER PIECE

Well I am senior at Ernest Righetti High School. This is my last year of being forced to do something that I am not interested. After this I will be able to do whatever I want and enjoy. Which is to attend cosmetology at Paul Mitchel. At first that wasn't even on my mind. As a kid many of us would say a pro this or that. Which is awesome if you want to still do it and are very talented if you make it and I hope who ever wants this accomplishes it. I have changed my mind so many times as i was growing up like; a chef, a baker, a police officer, a doctor, a clinic forensic psychologist. Something that makes a lot of money. But later on in my life I received amazing advice from my father. Which was "Do something that makes you happy. Not that makes a lot of money." Which I sat there to take it in and I realized he was right. He continued and asked me, "Would you rather do something you love and enjoy and doesn't even feel like you're getting paid. Or would you want to dread to go to work and be miserable?" Well that was an obvious answer UMM be happy! Duh! What I came up with was doing hair which I love doing and I do it everyday anyways. Well that is part of my master piece and a part of me.

Tuesday, October 1, 2013

NOTES 9-18


THESIS- statement of an argument that you tend to prove.

*Makes a differences thoughtful essay and simple retelling of facts.
*Gives an idea of a structure. There is a frame around it.
*It goes at the end of the first paragraph.
*The thesis is like the engine of a car. It should drive the essay.
*Should be contestable- Reader should understand it right away.
*Should be specific and focused.
*Your thesis should be something that you have evidence about also flexible.
*Do a pre write.
*It should be a map and help them to look for throughout
*Avoid first person.
*Passed the so what test.

4 TEST TO KNOW YOU HAVE A GOOD THESIS
*Does the thesis include(address) all parts of the questions.
*A reasonable reader respond to it as duh or so what.
*Does it avoid generally phrasing such words like all such etc.
*Does it lead the reader toward the topic sentence.
 

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